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The journey was long and tiresome, however the scene was most beautiful. I folded my newspaper in half and laid it on the grimy, plastic table on the train, as I simultaneously looked out of the smeared window. The black and white patches against the swaying, lush green grass reminded me about my childhood days in the Welsh valley. Le’ Paris gallery de art was a bubbling, bustling place and as I approached, crowds were gathered to see the famous, priceless piece of art work. When my eyes saw the sight of the ‘Boeuf’ I went back in time to the valley…. Never would I eat a burger again!
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December 2nd, 2011 at 4:31 pm
Well done Henry this is a stunning peice of work you used lots of good words.
November 8th, 2011 at 2:14 pm
I loved the way you wrote very good adjectives.
November 7th, 2011 at 7:45 pm
WOW WOW WOW! What fantastic writing Henry! I can’t believe how super your writing actually is – you should be so proud! Keep it up chuck!
November 4th, 2011 at 8:11 am
Wow!Henry this 100 word challenge is brilliant good use os vcop and ly oeners this 100 word challenge is so fanastic that it nearly made exsplode!
October 31st, 2011 at 3:16 pm
WOW!that was awsome it nearly made me cry. Were do you get your talent from also good use of VCOP.
October 31st, 2011 at 3:06 pm
Good use of wow words like simultaneously. Good use of commas.
from Daniel
October 28th, 2011 at 10:20 pm
I love this! You’ve clearly thought a great deal about the picture and the images it conjures for you. The alliteration of bubbling and bustling is great and really creates a picture in my head!
October 26th, 2011 at 10:33 am
Henry, your piece of writing is brilliant! I think you have made lots of connections in your writing and as the reader, I connected with it and you too.
Keep up the good work, I am very proud of you. You are fantastic!!
October 25th, 2011 at 6:07 am
Stunning writing Henry! Your description of the countryside was excellent & I loved the ending. You have been very clever with your use of French here as well. Brilliant writing!Hope your holiday is going well!
October 21st, 2011 at 3:24 pm
Super word choices and ambitious sentence structures. Do you usually eat burgers? Try to start sentences with openers or connectives.
November 3rd, 2011 at 3:14 pm
Thank you for all your brilliant comments. Yes I do eat burgers. Not always.